Children ride their sleighs
Found under the glowing trees.
Snow falls so gently,
As carols are sung so sweetly,
On this gorgeous winter day.
This simple and direct poem is a tanka, an ancient Japanese form with 31 syllables (5, 7, 5, 7, 7). Though a rhyme scheme is unnecessary, this poem has one of ABCCA.
It depicts the merry mood of Christmastime, providing imagery of happy, playing children and the cheery atmosphere, with beautiful snow and happy carolers.
The snow's act of gentle falling is personification. "So" is repeated in lines #3 and 4.
"Glowing trees" means Christmas trees.
Frank, I like the light atmosphere of this cheery poem. I also like how it kind of covers what that time of the year is all about in just 5 lines. As for some of the words, just personal opinion, but I kind of felt that some of the words were forced to fill the syllable requirements (e.g. the two "so"s) but even so, it's a good poem and I liked it.
ReplyDeleteAlthought i don't really get the rhyme scheme the poem is well written. You make the snow seem like it glows and gives off a good vibe. It falls so that children and others can enjoy it.
ReplyDeleteGreat work!